in Solitude!

by admin on July 23, 2009

I am no a poet! Writing is not my passion actually… not good at it. But what I have now is something very new. Lolz!I created a poem! So lolz!

I don’t know how to construct it, what steps to follow or what kind of poem would I create,   but I’ve read a lot of poems these days! So nose-bleeding. Maybe they were the reasons why I composed mine.

Actually, I started making it  when heading for home just this afternoon. I even had a long walk just to dig my brain and  gather flowering words.

“in SOLITUDE” is my working title.

I hope you will have time criticizing, commenting or suggesting.

It would be highly appreciated!

memories… breeze in,
expeditiously as a wind;
in a seventh heaven,
or under the moon not shinin’.

halting it, is no possible
like gushing river so unstoppable;
purposely and endlessly,
it will always heavenly stay.

best if clouds are nine,
a moment to unwind;
worst when hell freezes over,
a time to suffer.

myriad-star memories,
so vast so countless;
it will forever intrude,
… in SOLITUDE!

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ritz July 23, 2009 at 3:56 pm

cayoo budy and good luck 4 u my friends

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admin Reply:

thankS…

gooDluCk to you Too..

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brVince July 23, 2009 at 4:27 pm

i sense the feeling of aloneness… retrospective thoughts? Magaling! :)

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admin Reply:

aheheh! wla lng magawa.. ahehheh!

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admin July 24, 2009 at 1:04 am

thank you So muCh…
ill be creating more if my powers can..

aehheh!

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The Lady in Green Ruffles July 24, 2009 at 1:27 am

love your post..got carried away!

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admin Reply:

sure?

ahehehh! wala kabang Comment? aheheh!

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The Lady in Green Ruffles July 24, 2009 at 2:10 am

the poem is ok..it is somehow made me nosebleed..wahehe

thanksness!

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admin Reply:

toinkS…wahahah!

cg!

thanks For Commenting again…wahahh! love youR altest Post pala….

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The Lady in Green Ruffles Reply:

thanx din..

ok lang ung length nya

pero parang medyo short

pero ok na rin xe u delivered the message well

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admin Reply:

wahahhah!

DumuduDo na nga utak ko sa kakaisip lng Words…

esp in Ryming…

whahah!

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The Lady in Green Ruffles Reply:

pwede ka din naman magcompose ng free writing e..prose

diba

gogogo

try and try lang!

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admin Reply:

wahhaH!

seGuru iT takes a special moment to Compose..

wahhah! hayaan moh…iF emo Uli ako..
maybe i cud compOse onE!

The Lady in Green Ruffles Reply:

korek! panapanahon lang yan..basta post mo ulit ha..

admin Reply:

oH Sure….

aheheh! ill be preparing tissue along with me… para naman i CuD wipE my NoSe bleeding …aheheh!

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The Lady in Green Ruffles Reply:

go go go

gusto mo ako na magprovide ng tissue

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admin Reply:

cg bah…

aheheh!

dapt facial Tissur hap…wahaha!

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The Lady in Green Ruffles Reply:

oo ba, no prob!

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admin Reply:

ahheehe! dito ka naman uli..

ahheheheh!

The Lady in Green Ruffles Reply:

bakit, ayaw mo b?

admin Reply:

ahehehe! k lng naman… ahhahha

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akda July 24, 2009 at 2:27 am

that was very nice.i felt so relaxed and the words were just settling in me. twas like reminiscing the heavenly past. this poem feels good.

nice! ^_^

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admin Reply:

thank you So Much…. ^_^

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nuts July 24, 2009 at 3:11 am

that was great. it takes an inspiration for me to compose a poem esp when i’m deeply sad.

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admin Reply:

i had a hard time composing it…

especially the last part….

ahehehe!

Thanks for the comment.

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shea July 24, 2009 at 4:35 am

hmmm..eto nosebleed…hahaha

sometimes you need it

being alone doesnt mean your lonely

you just have to feel it and experience it so that you know how to be happy…

teka… tama ba pinagsasabi ko dito?
hehehe

nakanang.. basta un na un..

nice post..

\m/

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admin Reply:

wahah !enx sa Comment….

yeah Being alone iS good …. but not all the time hap.

aehheh!

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Bryan Karl July 24, 2009 at 9:48 am

Hmmm poetic na kaayo si Mark o. Nosebleed pa jud ayo ug words… ^:)^

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admin Reply:

Sure bry oi…
wahah! paila nas y linGaw…
wahahha!

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Bailey July 24, 2009 at 10:14 am

it’s actually very nice ;) keep it up…

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admin Reply:

really?
ahehhehe!
im still not confident about it….

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jodi July 24, 2009 at 12:22 pm

you are so makata, congrats for that poem…

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admin Reply:

wahhahha!
1st time poh…

thanks poh pala sa pag CommeNt… :)

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Goryo Dimagiba July 24, 2009 at 8:24 pm

This is nice.. you have a blood of an artist.. keep it up =)

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admin Reply:

really? im Flattered! Lolx..

thanKs..

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RockmanderZ July 25, 2009 at 2:05 am

hehe, nice poem! I love it, hope I could compose something like that too..:)

gudluck!

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admin Reply:

wahhaha! try kalang..
i knoW u can create too..

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Mon July 25, 2009 at 3:44 am

Cool poem. You have the potential. keep it up :)
added you already in my blogroll. i’d appreciate it if u do the same. :)

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admin Reply:

oh! thankS….

added you Too..

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Blogfornoob Dot Com July 25, 2009 at 3:49 am

EMo??? hehe

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admin Reply:

wahahha! Not really~ aheheh

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Ax July 25, 2009 at 5:55 am

rhyme, rhyme!

and the photo suggest ’solitude.’

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admin Reply:

aheheheh!
wala lang!

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sweetham July 25, 2009 at 11:54 am

sounds good but i have no talent in interpreting poems. Hehehe :)

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admin Reply:

ahehhhe!

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Obnoxious Queer July 26, 2009 at 1:30 am

With that, you’re a poet na Marky!

Good thing, you’ve showcased you Poetic site as well.

Good one!

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admin Reply:

nah Mag Sure ta X oi…
wahhah!

salamat sa Time sa Pag Comment…

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Aimee July 26, 2009 at 9:37 am

your poem is promising, actually! yay for that :) ) continue with it..
you could also read Pablo Neruda’s poems. i love his works XD

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admin Reply:

aha! aha! TnX aimEE…
hOpe i Cud have that Moment again…
wahhah!

tnx also for Sharing… aweee…

sure ill be reading that poems you sharEd!

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flamindevil July 26, 2009 at 10:16 am

wow.the poem is really deep.

hindi ko kayang gumawa ng ganito.hehe

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admin Reply:

ahahha! kaya Ko yan Dude!
gawa ka lang…
u Too will be Shocked!

ahahhah! TnX for commenting…

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Mikyu July 26, 2009 at 11:47 am

nice one OMG! hahaha. :P
mas wah kui talent anang composing and stuff. but when i feel a lot of emotions, especially knang ma.depress ko, i am able to write something out of the ordinary. hahahaha. XD

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admin Reply:

ahahh! BecauSe uR Extra ordinary…

ahehhehhe!

i knoW you can makE It…

aehheh!

Thats For sure.,..

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Pink Note July 27, 2009 at 5:46 am

you’re doing good! simple pero rock na poem! Keep it up..=)

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admin Reply:

wahhah!
tnX soooo much…ahehhe!
nahan kayu ko ana nga linE…

SimPle pEru roCk..ahehheh!

tnX gain!

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dencios July 28, 2009 at 9:03 am

ayoko ng masyadong malungkot na poem kasi malungkot na ang buhay ko sa dubai kaya daoat hindi na mag dwell sa ganitong feelings.

try to find hapines, sigurado ako hindi mo lang nakikita pero meron yan, maniwala ka lang :)

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admin Reply:

aha! agree with you….

den mag enjot ka lang ja nsa Dubai…

aheheh!

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madz July 29, 2009 at 2:21 am

Hi Mark,

I guess there’s no right or wrong in writing a poem, as long as you had expressed your feelings. It’s just like a music without the hymn. I used to write poems when I was in high school :)

God Bless,
Madz

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admin Reply:

aheheh!
tnX you so Much….
aheheh!

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zyza August 8, 2009 at 12:36 pm

OMG! tissue hahahahaha

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admin Reply:

wahahah! … na hala panrapo..

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The Lady in Green Ruffles September 4, 2009 at 9:29 pm

halu! im beck!

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mark Reply:

ahehhehe! May Ne Post ako… Punta ka sa HoMe page Ko.. ahhhehh! …Comment ka ha? ahehheh!

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Suckingbird Keller February 16, 2010 at 10:22 am

nice blog :) keep writing

Oh Porous Sky

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